User talk:Gauzz Rifle/Fanon

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About your fanon, I was quite displeased on what you have decided to write down. If you want me to point out the flaws you have made, then allow me to do so.


 * Your own character is too overpowered, meaning no weaknesses. "On par with Erza" and "slightly better than Erza" is like saying that your own character has "god mode" within an anime, in which he cannot and will not fail or even let himself be taken down, or in other words - your character is Mary Sueish.


 * Your character has an allusion exactly copied several traits of different characters from video games. One of which, is Raul Menendez. You copied his kickass, evil personality. Oh, don't forget to mention that you have also copied a young Ezio. Why? You have described your own character as handsome, good at making girls squeal and he has talent for revenge, something a young Ezio have. hose.,Copy-pastes? I hate those.