User blog comment:IamJakuhoRaikoben/WT Chapter 1: Wiki Tail, Review./@comment-4047931-20120719180220

Well I enjoyed this little fan-based pilot. I hardly knew anything about this apart from that it existed so I really didn't know what to expect from it so all I could think was if it would be good or not, but I must say I was pleasantly surprised. Nice characters, nice magic and a nice bit of humour (even though there were few milk puns). Anyway on to the chapter.

Well we start off by meeting with Jak Steel and Ral Zelik, which I found Ral to be the more appealing of the two at the moment, adding a more comedic value to the series then the others, but it was a pity that he turned into Bickslow when fighting. I felt that the start was a bit slow which wasn't necessarily a bad thing as it gave the characters time to develop a bit with Jak being a bit too angry wanting to kill someone over a map, yet kind in willing to help those in trouble and Ral being a bit more laid back wanting a drink before a what could tough job, yet patronizing seeing how he was looking down on -Jay and then goes to help her by giving her money. Anyway after meeting these two we meet -Jay Violet, a girl who would rather get mauled by a tiger then attack it because she touched it's cub out of curiosity. I didn't really like her compared to the other two mainly because of the reason she was being chased felt really stupid to me and it didn't do much credit to her character and I didn't find her back story very interesting, but the daggers seemed cool and she was funny in the bar.

Now with introductions out of the way we move on to the plot. Hunting down an assassin was rather cool for an introduction to the series even if I really couldn't take a person named Milky Lactia very seriously, but she was interesting enough and her cruel and dark nature helped change that (well till the end that was, with the moo laugh). Anyway we got -Jay looking for revenge for the murder of her parents by Milky and Jak and Ral hunting Milky down on a job. I was drawn into the story by this because with these two groups were after the same person and it made me wonder how things would end up between them as -Jay was going in for the kill and Jak and Ral was looking to capture her so this made me want to read on and opened a door to crate conflict between the group. So with Ral a few Jewels shorter and the missions explained, -Jay is at a bar called Joe's (by the why that idea for the name totally inspired by The Simpsons) and we now get or first look at the villain of this chapter Milky. I liked Milky when she brutally cut down everyone in the bar just to get to her target; it made appear dark and willing to go to extremes to finish her job. So with -Jay taken away it was up to our heroes to say the day and with a terrible milk pun away they go and we finally got to see their powers, but seriously who came up with the joke? Before that though we Milky was beating -Jay and we saw a little bit of development on Milky's behalf, but I it was just too vague for me liking and done badly done. "Why do you deserve happiness but I don't!" well maybe if you told us a bit about what happened to make you feel this way. That line annoyed me. There was time to tell us a little bit about Milky but the question where left unanswered. What took the happiness for your life? What made want to do these dirty jobs? Is it really just for the money or is it because you enjoy the pain you bring? If you told us saying this would have had reason. I could have sympathized with crazy, murdering b*tch Milky but I felt that this input seemed pointless as not explaining this made me feel rather disappointed and I thought just making her enjoy her job would have been better. Anyway with the beating over and done with Jak and Ral arrive to kick her ass. The magic performed in this chapter was interesting, clones being summoned (even though the name was rather lame and funny, but Abe was one of the writers so it was kind of expected) and I wasn't surprised see Ral using puppet totems (as if the cover wasn't a big enough hint. I mean the name even gave it away for me), but that said I still enjoyed the Idea of the forming up like a bazooka and Jak's drop kicking magic was awesome. I enjoyed all the magic at the end and was surprised that we didn’t see Jak’s and that he willingly let -Jay to go and get her revenge. With –Jay joining the fight the final confrontation between -Jay and Milky began and it was quite cool, despite the stupid moo laugh. Personally I thought the daggers being used to cut a rift between Earth Land and the Celestial Spirit Realm would be better if instead of dropping the daggers, but reading about Taumerus and how he chopped Milky into pieces was cool. It was good the Milky wasn't defeated so easily because it left but for an even better finish to her evil plans. With Milky back who didn't see this coming? Death by drinking! The bull drank her! That was brilliant and with Milky done with The ending I expected occurred with -Jay joining the guild Wiki Tail leaving it open for a second chapter.

I liked this. It wasn't boring and it always had something happening be it a girl being chased by a tiger or a mass murder in a tavern. There were parts which were pretty bad in my opinion that being Milky in her hideout beating -Jay and that part where Milky first approached -Jay, but these problems didn't stop me from enjoying the chapter. Overall good work being better than I expected it to be and I hope to see more. I'll leave with some questions though. Will we know the ages of the characters soon? How long do you expect the next chapter to come out? And why does -Jay have "-" in front of the Jay? Anyway good Job to all of you involved, and Rem your drawings are pretty damn good.

P.S. Milk minions were weak to fire?