User blog comment:Relikz/Sorcerer Magazine, Issue 23: November 2013/@comment-7418318-20131208132848

I'm through with the first fanfict and while it was very good, there are several things I wasn't too fond of. I'd give it around 8.5.

Particularly the "heart-stabbing" scene was awkward. First X get's stabbed right through the heart, then X's body is aleady cold in Y's hands. Then Y goes totally berserk due to grief only for it to turn out that X was just in a two month long coma? Seriously?

But it was interresting how Jellal was "baring his soul" by covering up his face. Quite the irony. ^^