User blog comment:IamJakuhoRaikoben/WT Chapter 1: Wiki Tail, Review./@comment-1896886-20120719192200

Okeeeeey... I've read it... and well... You know I'm always honest so I won't lie to you... Idea was good. What about rest, well... I will start with the story... Technical parts:
 * -Jay Violet... Tell me... who, just after meeting two totally strange people, is telling them about her dramatic experience, her money, her status...? Revealing all this at the first dialog makes her a really vain woman...  Same was when Jak asked her if she wanna be a member of WT... Date? She has some big ego if you wanna ask me...
 * As for assassin, Milky is acting really open, straight and she doesn't show any special assassin abilities... I could be a better one then she is. She could at least torture -Jay to bring from her some infos, without this babbling about happiness and stuff...
 * I don't have any problems with references, but ctr+c/ctr+v from Bickslow is not gonna work...
 * I don't think milky magic is funny... rather ridiculous.
 * And Jak is acting like pushover... I'm still believing that is because he's team's brain, not because he's weak.
 * It was kinda hard to get into world you have created - you should give some more descriptions maybe?
 * You guys have a great sens of humor... It couldn't find it in this...

Still it's you first time, and as they said - it always hurts... Sorry for hard one, but you know me :P